Well thats alot less than perfect. first of all SYMMETRY! dont use it, too boring and slow.
also you couldve easily got a decap and a split.
next grab! dont grab for too long, it almost never looks good.
and you didnt even use relax, use it.
1/10
some tips:
look around the forums and watch the 'premier' replay maker's replays. i recommend
Dragenon, Me (RayA75), Sprytryne, Pulse, Marco, and Larfen. Also watch some replays that are already in replay folder. try to imitate the speed, style, finesse and destruction of those people.
Use relax, but don't over use it.when something isnt moving or not in use, relax it.
Get your own style, add little touches to your movements to help make it unique
LONG LIVE GOOD REPLAYS.