Drop the shadow and the neon-glow-shitstorm thing, it just looks overkilled.
The choice of font is good, something it does lack is a exclamation mark, like this "!". And in stead of the glow and shit, maybe add some blood drip/splatter in stead?
Shitty example...
Last edited by Fenris; Mar 1, 2013 at 06:25 PM.