Hey friend. You might want to work on your basic English if you'd like to write poems. Presentation is a big part of poetry, and you seem to misspell quite often and make grammatical errors. I do, however, see a lot of potential in your writing. Cleaning up a few small problems should probably make your writing pretty good. I can clearly see and appreciate the effort put into this, and admire that you can stick to a single project for this long. Good work.
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