Hah,Nice video,I like it xD.But,I don't really think it would fit the mood of the vid.For example,I think you intend to make it Mp,And mostly it'll be wushu I guess.My opinion about it is that the introdctions can be like you show yourself for example in some nice highlights,then camera stops,and you get you're name.
Introduction can also be something like one replay with lots of comebacks,and the player starts to transforms from one clan member to another,maybe.
Although,I like the video that you made,a lot(I'm a sucker for football xD),but I think it might turn out anti-climatic overall.
As this is your first try at video making,the simpler you keep it,just clean effects,the better it will get,that's my thoughts on the thing.Hopefully,it may help ya.