Pretty good first edit, a few things you are lacking.

Sync
Colour Correction
Effects
Better transitions
shaders

You Keyframes were actually pretty good man. Keep it up.

Also if you haven't read DatSkip's tutorial, you should. http://forum.toribash.com/showthread.php?t=503457

Thanks guys! Since it's a WiP, I'm gonna try to throw in some effects, sync, shaders, and possibly better transitions?

And maybe a new song that fits it

Idk man, I find the song completely fine.
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I finshed it!

The tune is a bit slow. You might use a more upbeat tempo tune for the longer edits of music that keeps the attention of the audience.

I like it, but one question, why did you swap Largekilla's and Swexx's textures in the spar?

XD Finally somebody says it! Yeah, that was a mistake, and I was half finished till I realized that I swapped them out.

Alright, so BBKing has made a clan armband that looks good. I have added it to the OP if you want to download it.
You are always free to ask me for recolors.

oooh, nice! Thanks BB.

Here are your recolors boys.