A dueler is only a good as his finest lift.
lel0uch: i think its fine, seeing as this was a FREE-HAND draw. edward is so edward... he is just staring into shit space, thats what he does... (you might wanna make him staring at bella). for now i think you real problem is the nose on bella
This look pretty cool.
Being how I'm not such a big fan of Twilight, I hate to like drawings of the characters, but this is nice.
The person who looks most like themselves in your drawing is Jacob.
Bella's face needs to be a bit more round and "peachy"..
Edward's eyebrows need to be raised a tad, and he needs to have a little more hair above his left ear (his perspective).
Other than that, this looks pretty good and will likely turn into something better.
7/10