Don't make a lyric vid next time...
and dont let the intro be as long as the actual vid itself. 10 secs, wtf man.
The overlay was a bit too much, considering the laggy replays it was on top of.
You're worried too much on effects when you should just be perfecting velo and keyframing in toribash.
I couldn't even tell what was going on in the vid because of effects, mate.
It's progress, though.