Agreed with FNugget. Use some speed variations. Slow some parts, speed some parts up. Try to sync it with the music more than it is. Especially with the song you chose. There are plenty of hard bass kicks and breaks in that song. Use them WITH your vid. I think that would improve it 200%
4/10

Watch Moop's vid "Smooth Criminal" it's full of win. Pay attention to the music, especially the snare drum, it goes along perfectly with a lot of the replays. Click.