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http://forum.toribash.com/showthread.php?t=473681

ok.

the replay was pretty nice, but I don't like how you split him.

yea it was weird but I worked with it, kinda.
So like I am trying to work on spinny stuff, manips, speed, and flow. I made this wip, I am now 13 (as of today, yay), so I named it 13

You really don't want to try manips in -30 grav. They're extremely hard and generally don't look amazing because they're messy and it's hard to get uke spinning with any speed.
You really didn't hit uke hard enough to actually manip him, it was more of a carry type situation. In terms of manippong, you didn't really do that bad of a job, you kept him in the air without hitting your head for the most part which is impressive, but work on aiming your hits so that he actually gets spinning and it looks a lot more impressive.

yeah, it was realllly hard to have flow and speed, I tried to make it look somewhat pleasing to the eyes.

Made a quick split cap so yeah.

Thanks for the cnc guys, it warms my heart.

!w-13: The opener was ok but your leg twitched because you chose to keep it contracted after extending it for a few frames. Yeah, don't do that. And I gotta agree with 'Scigs, you really don't want to make a manip...that lasts for a while. I'm ok if you manip uke for a short time, but don't do it too much or you'll get more twitchy in it. The transition was filled with nice flow, but I didn't like how you grabbed uke when you only dismembered one of his parts. I saw you having a bit of difficulty trying to carry his whole body without his head and leg. Try to dm at least 3 specific parts to get him lightly. The arm punch was cool, but the last dismember...work on that.
I say that replay was ok.

!w-breeze: Awesome opener with a sweepish kick to uke splitting him in half, but that part when you yanked him to the ground dismembering him didn't interest me that much. The pose was ok. I'd prefer not to pose using a knee to stand up. That was almost the best short replay I've seen. Good job.
Up and at 'em you go to your replays. :3 I want moar (that's what she said)

hi ok thanks I'm back

13- Not the best opener IMO, I know you wanted him off balance, but it just looked like inaccuracy. You have nice fluidity, but manipulation isn't something I'd do on -30 gravity. There was a little too much contact when he was on top of you, and the dms were a little sloppy. The pose wasn't too bad but off balance. Well done anyway, and good effort. Grats on being a teen :]

Breeze- I really liked it. The kick was smooth and quick- very nice. I liked the little tug on his arm to get the decap, it added a little quirkiness to the replay. The pose was good, but I agree with Devil, avoid using your knee to prop yourself up, although it still looked nice.

Sensory Overload- Nice, but not amazing. It was smooth and graceful, and I liked the kick to knock him over a bit. I wasn't a fan of the punch. I'm not huge on decap punches anyway, unless they're really hard. I'm more of a bifurcate punch kind of guy. Because you were in the air, it didn't look like there was a lot of power in it, because you didn't have anything to push off of. Also, because you were spinning, there wasn't much of a windup, which made the punch look weak (although it did get the decap). I really liked the pose, but I would have tried to pull my arms in closer in the same movement as the landing, rather than kind of an afterthought. Well done regardless!

There you go! I like your replays, keep going