The font you used looks absolutely horrid. The wallpaper would be much better with no text at all.
Smacking a title on there in large print is an amateur move. It's like making a drawing and in the top right corner placing a large, obtrusive, 'BY: <INSERT NAME HERE>'. If you're going to do anything, at least put some professionalism into it.
Although, the render is nice. Wouldn't kill it to have some post processing, but, eh.