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Name: Leonbebo (Leon)

Belt: 2nd dan black belt


Bans, infractions, or warnings: none at all

Past clans and why you left them: I joined this clan called assassins and they kick me after one hour.
Anyone you know in this clan: I have met the members before
but they wont remember me.

Why do you want us: This clan looks like it could be the best clan in toribash
Why should we want you: I'm very good in judo. I'm good at finding Really good people for the clan. We can always have a good laugh and chill.

Best and Worst mods: Really Good at judo Not do good at wushu though. but every other mod= fine

One or two paragraphs about yourself: I am currently 12 years old.
I live in the UK. I Really like sports.
I like to chill and talk to people and hear what they think. I've got 1 Younger brother and 2 Younger sisters. I Represent the school in athletics. And I love to talk :P .

I'm Leon and it would be sweet if you accepted my form,
But for now... Peace

http://www.toribash.com/usercard/leonbebo.png



Even if I have posted other application, please give me a chance
Originally Posted by leonbebo View Post
Name: Leonbebo (Leon)

Belt: 2nd dan black belt


Bans, infractions, or warnings: none at all

Past clans and why you left them: I joined this clan called assassins and they kick me after one hour.
Anyone you know in this clan: I have met the members before
but they wont remember me.

Why do you want us: This clan looks like it could be the best clan in toribash
Why should we want you: I'm very good in judo. I'm good at finding Really good people for the clan. We can always have a good laugh and chill.

Best and Worst mods: Really Good at judo Not do good at wushu though. but every other mod= fine

One or two paragraphs about yourself: I am currently 12 years old.
I live in the UK. I Really like sports.
I like to chill and talk to people and hear what they think. I've got 1 Younger brother and 2 Younger sisters. I Represent the school in athletics. And I love to talk :P .

I'm Leon and it would be sweet if you accepted my form,
But for now... Peace

http://www.toribash.com/usercard/leonbebo.png



Even if I have posted other application, please give me a chance

For the last time, NO. This is like your 5th time and it is getting annoying. If you really want to join a clan, I suggest you apply for another one because we are really fed up with you being here. You are even missing an important phrase as well, so I suggest you leave.
Originally Posted by leonbebo View Post
Name: Leonbebo (Leon)

Belt: 2nd dan black belt


Bans, infractions, or warnings: none at all

Past clans and why you left them: I joined this clan called assassins and they kick me after one hour.
Anyone you know in this clan: I have met the members before
but they wont remember me.

Why do you want us: This clan looks like it could be the best clan in toribash
Why should we want you: I'm very good in judo. I'm good at finding Really good people for the clan. We can always have a good laugh and chill.

Best and Worst mods: Really Good at judo Not do good at wushu though. but every other mod= fine

One or two paragraphs about yourself: I am currently 12 years old.
I live in the UK. I Really like sports.
I like to chill and talk to people and hear what they think. I've got 1 Younger brother and 2 Younger sisters. I Represent the school in athletics. And I love to talk :P .

I'm Leon and it would be sweet if you accepted my form,
But for now... Peace

http://www.toribash.com/usercard/leonbebo.png



Even if I have posted other application, please give me a chance

This is your fifth application in two days. Please never post here again.
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For being the first chapter, the tone could have been set up better. The exposition for a story involving a post-apocalyptic setting would generally be more effective if you were to show the scene throughout the beginning chapters, rather than telling of it in the first chapter. I feel that this chapter would work well if it introduces the characters in medias res, which establishes the setting, and gives you a starting point with which to expand upon.

If I was an individual with a slightly shorter attention span, and I read this first chapter as it is, I would very quickly lose interest. There needs to be something which keeps the new reader interested, before they choose become emotionally invested in the story.