Originally Posted by
fudgiebalz
Could you elaborate? I can't improve much if I don't know what I'm doing wrong ;)
I got you covered since I'm bored.
Sqiggly Lines: In my opinion, this replay is superb, and 3 replays like this will get you right in here. Very smooth flow, clean hits, everything looks great in this one.
Therrameth: Everything up to the split is good. After that it goes a bit downhill. It takes a while for you to get set up for your jump, and I didn't like how "standard" looking the jump was either. Just by looking at it, I feel like a better option in this replay would've been to dm the leg section a bit to kill time while you wait for the torso to fall, then get the decap. You looked a bit stiff in the air after your jump. I didn't like how much shin you hit uke with in the decap, but I'm not sure how avoidable that was. A little bit of twitching on your way to the pose as well.
eloberat: Probably the worst of the bunch here. Opener could've been cool if you had gotten a bit more flow out of it, there was a bit too much of a floaty section at the end of your second "kick". The section from 400-300 was really good. Last kick had waaaaay too much shin, and your body looks really stiff and just overall bad after it. Pose was nice though.
Overall, I'd say you have a really unique style of movement composed already, but your hits can be a bit ugly sometimes (they're really nice sometimes too though). To capitalize on your movement, I'd say either try and make some more complex replays, like a madman or something like your first replay (those are more impressive, and likely to make an impact), or you can try and emphasize the unique aspects of your movement and try and get really creative with the way you control your tori (I, personally, have found this strategy to be very fun).