Killerbotx: In the first two replays the manips are an effort only to keep uke in the air, completely sacrificing how your tori looks while doing so, lots of small pushes and tweaking whenever possible, all of which is caused by poor setups and stances. While you're pushing uke you also need to consider how your limbs are positioned, and edit so that they land on the ground in a good position to push off and continue your movement. While manipulating uke you should also plan ahead and get into good landing positions to push off the ground in uke's direction. In your replays you just pushed off the ground with whatever limb was closest to it and pushed uke spasmodically whenever you got close to him.
The third replay is technically somewhat impressive but too unremarkable to make up for the first two. My vote is no.
I'll comment on Ash4136 later today
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Ash4136: The first replay is fine until you get the grab, your movement in the opener is very cool, but after that it becomes a rush to get dms in the fastest way possible. Jumping up while grabbing the part you want to dm is generally a bad idea because you're stuck in midair with nothing to do but swing your limbs around to kick whatever you're grabbing, limiting your options. Plus afterwards you have to wait to land on the ground to do anything else.
My opinion of the second replay is similar, you move around well before you get the grab (ignoring that the opener is more or less the same as the first replay's), after that the hits are more or less what I expected, the dms are impressive but doing 3 consecutive hits in the same manner (grab -> swing around and kick what you grabbed) is tiring.
The third replay doesn't have so many of those hits, which works to its advantage, most of the replay is the opener and transitions between the hits, which are pretty cool. The skeet at the end is inconsequential, just makes me think you were dissatisfied with the replay and tried to add something to make it more interesting.
I like how you move around, it's not perfect but with practice can easily become awesome, I just think the replays you posted in general become worse once you start hitting uke, and especially grabbing. I suggest you try to make a replay without using grab entirely, or force yourself to do different hits instead of the easy grab and swingaround kick. For now I vote
no, but do come back again.
Last edited by pusga; Dec 29, 2017 at 06:28 PM.
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