The fps it's too low for the giant ammount of slow-motion.
In this video you shoul'd use fast motion not slow, but i know you will need more replays, then you can just use a little part of the song to the video.
The camera is very better this time, I see you used some effects, but you need to, when they lay out, when they are off, make it cleaner and smoothier, because it's too sudden when you put an effect and cut it like that in other second without nothing like lay out for example.
You need more sync, between the song beats and the hits, and there , when you got it, that perfect sync allows you to put effects on them and then make it look awesomener.