story asistance
hi ime wringhting a very short murder storry
and i mean short. i dont even care about my spelling. ime trieing to keep it around 900-1200 words. so far i has 670. (ime 13 so you can blame me for the story XD) ok here it is
2010 in a small town near the grand canyon, a young boy was born. by the look of things his life was going to be great. over the years the good and bad hapened. he got bulied, he got straght A`s in all his classes. everything was going swell. Then when he built his first robot, his father said "useing our metal to make a heap of junk is not what you are meant to do!" and the father smashed up the robot, and as the sparks flew, the father put the boys hand on the bare wires and said "Repeat! Building is bad. Building is bad!!" the boy repeated. that night the boy swore that he would get revenge on his father in any way posible. he grew to a age of 15 when that revenge finaly came. a robot claw... on wheels for easy transport. he asked his dad if they could go to the Grand canyon, his dad said Yes.
when they got to the canyon, the boy reasembled the robot. his dad was saying how he shouldnt have done some stuff over the years. the boy didnt realise that his dad was talking to him as he asembled the robot. as he activated the robot. some people from his old school started makeing fun of him. He was furious and wouldnt take there rubish. he grabed them with the claw. and droped them into the canyon. as he stood there laughing. his dad came along. and complememted what he had made. once again, he did not here. He grabed his father, took him to the cliff edge. and said "if you werent so mean to me, this wouldnt have happened!" the father was saying how sorry he was. and that suplies werent avalible when that happened. the boy didnt listen... as the boy droped his father off the edge, he realised what his dad was saying, but it was to late. once his dad had died, he realised that he was not made for good, he was not made for bad, he was made to kill... he locked himself in the basement of a house they were going to demolish. as he sat there listening to the buldozers, he thought "am i going to die in this hole? am i going to get out?" it was to late for escape. the rubble had colapsed over the exit and he was stuck there... but was there still escape?
the boy was searching around the basement looking for anything to kill time. he discovered a huge freeser, full of raw meat. he ate the meat every day and night, his body geting used to it, the meat doesnt effect his health anymore. eventualy he escaped the basment. He had become crazy. his mind playing tricks. he steped out of the bacement to find himself in a helish wasteland, or was it just his mind? when he looked at somebody he saw a hellish beast. he hid, and disapeared back into the seller were nobody goes... but he left a small gift for the hellish world. a robot, desighned to upgrade and sustane its self.
murders started popping up all over the town. people dieing. the police tried everything they could to get a finger print or anything from the crime sean. they found nothing. they called in for a profesional, his name, inspector James Bartholamule. he is the worlds best. as his plane arived. he said to the pilot "dont land me here... take me above the town for a birds eye view". as he looked he could see were the murders had happened. he saw a patern. the murders were going in a diagonaly through the town.
i am COMPLEATLY out of ideas. and realy anoyed.
Last edited by VayneKuagari; Nov 11, 2008 at 06:51 PM.