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[Story] The Rise of Tori
I had to make a story for English so...
The Rise of Tori
Background
A long time ago, when the world was plagued with evil and spite. There was two forces, good and evil. The world was in a desperate struggle to keep order.
In this ancient world, warriors did not fight with guns and ammo, swords and shields, or sticks and rocks. These warrior fought with their fists and each had there own very unique blend of fighting styles. There where those who preferred remaining as relaxed as possible, where as others favored a stiff style. Besides being different fighting styles, there where also many different fighting rules. There was Judo, Wushu, Aikido, and the most honored of all fighting styles, Sparring.
In Sparring, the opponents would start 30 yards apart and charge at each other. This fight would be to the death. Only the most elite warriors where allowed to Spar, as it was much to advanced for the young fighters.
The Order of Uke
The Order of Uke started as a gang. Through the years they went from gang to clan to organization to full out race. There leader, Uke, was a elite fighter. He was a child of abusive parents. His daily beatings and starvation made Uke strong and self reliant. He grew up a convict, and when he got out of jail he started a gang. He ran the gang with an iron fist. As the gang grew few tried to take over position of leader. In everyone of those fights, Uke won, and had them killed.
The Order of Uke started bye taking over neighbors houses. This need for space forced them to take over whole neighborhoods and eventually entire cities. Currently, The Order of Uke controls around 85% of all resources going in and out of the country. They are slaughtering all how defy them. They fight very smooth and relaxed, which is startling to the person who has to fight them for the first time. A few fighters where used to fighting against relaxed fighters, and where starting to take back some territory. Unfortunately, they were always beaten by a small army of the order. They were all completely overwhelmed by the surprise bum rushes. All but one, Tori.
Tori
On the side of Evil there was only one fighter that could not be beaten. That fighter was Tori. Tori did not have any fancy clothes or armor. He did not have the privilege to enjoy his childhood. Every hour of everyday had to do something with fighting.
Every morning at six he would go for his brutal 3 mile run. When he came back he was immediately put into a fight with another young villager. In all his fights Tori was never beaten. He was such an intensely well educated fighter. He fought very stiff, which some thought to be a disadvantage, but they never thought that after fighting him. At the age of 16 he was sent of to fight The Order of Uke. Tori did not like the order and the chaos it has brought. He has since worked his way up the ranks and is now going to fight Uke face to face. They decided to Spar. If he wins this fight the Order of Uke has decided to break ranks and become the average criminals again.
Preparation
Tori left his humble shack at 1:00 PM that day. The fight was scheduled to be at 5:00 PM. The ring was 2 hours away, and Tori figured that would be plenty of time to get to his destination.
Uke's castle was 5 minutes away from the ring, and did not bother getting out of bed until 10:00. He had a big breakfast feast and at 4:00 went down to the ring to warm up.
As Tori walked into the ring he saw three of his friends including Hampa, Veb, and Gman. He also saw some of The Order's greats; including KiTFox, Rutzor, and 3vi1 (pronounced Threevil). He was scarcely nervous and was ready to take the world out of this chaos.
The Fight
Tori and Uke entered the ring with there friends rooting them on. There would be no referee so almost anything goes. It was decided that the fight would begin as the clock tower rang four times. The pressure on both combatants must have been extreme; however, neither of them showed any signs of weakness.
Ding! That was the first ring of the bell the fight would start in a moment.
Ding! Both combatants took a deep breath, and got in there starting stance.
Ding! Uke took off running, attempting to catch Tori by surprise.
Ding! Uke was more then half way to Tori by this time. Tori held his honor and waited for the this bell to begin. Although Tori did not have the advantage, he still charged at Uke.
Time seemed to slow as the two competitors charged at each other. Birds did not sing, the water in the rivers ceased to flow, and the entire world held its breath. Tori and Uke were less then 10 yards apart. Uke lunged at Tori head first, yet again trying the catch him off guard. Tori extended his hips and extended his glutes. Tori's heel caught Uke straight in face. Uke gasped out his last breath as the destruction of Tori's heel caved in his head and snapped his neck. Uke's body slapped across the ground his friends stood there in astonishment. Their all powerful leader was beat with a single blow to the face. Tori's friends turned to congratulate him, but he was already gone. He wanted to go home and rest.
Anything I should add? (No, I will not add you to the story) I will be making a render to go with this, then I will submit it to Steve's Epic Scene Comp.
The Rise of Tori
Background
A long time ago, when the world was plagued with evil and spite. There was two forces, good and evil. The world was in a desperate struggle to keep order.
In this ancient world, warriors did not fight with guns and ammo, swords and shields, or sticks and rocks. These warrior fought with their fists and each had there own very unique blend of fighting styles. There where those who preferred remaining as relaxed as possible, where as others favored a stiff style. Besides being different fighting styles, there where also many different fighting rules. There was Judo, Wushu, Aikido, and the most honored of all fighting styles, Sparring.
In Sparring, the opponents would start 30 yards apart and charge at each other. This fight would be to the death. Only the most elite warriors where allowed to Spar, as it was much to advanced for the young fighters.
The Order of Uke
The Order of Uke started as a gang. Through the years they went from gang to clan to organization to full out race. There leader, Uke, was a elite fighter. He was a child of abusive parents. His daily beatings and starvation made Uke strong and self reliant. He grew up a convict, and when he got out of jail he started a gang. He ran the gang with an iron fist. As the gang grew few tried to take over position of leader. In everyone of those fights, Uke won, and had them killed.
The Order of Uke started bye taking over neighbors houses. This need for space forced them to take over whole neighborhoods and eventually entire cities. Currently, The Order of Uke controls around 85% of all resources going in and out of the country. They are slaughtering all how defy them. They fight very smooth and relaxed, which is startling to the person who has to fight them for the first time. A few fighters where used to fighting against relaxed fighters, and where starting to take back some territory. Unfortunately, they were always beaten by a small army of the order. They were all completely overwhelmed by the surprise bum rushes. All but one, Tori.
Tori
On the side of Evil there was only one fighter that could not be beaten. That fighter was Tori. Tori did not have any fancy clothes or armor. He did not have the privilege to enjoy his childhood. Every hour of everyday had to do something with fighting.
Every morning at six he would go for his brutal 3 mile run. When he came back he was immediately put into a fight with another young villager. In all his fights Tori was never beaten. He was such an intensely well educated fighter. He fought very stiff, which some thought to be a disadvantage, but they never thought that after fighting him. At the age of 16 he was sent of to fight The Order of Uke. Tori did not like the order and the chaos it has brought. He has since worked his way up the ranks and is now going to fight Uke face to face. They decided to Spar. If he wins this fight the Order of Uke has decided to break ranks and become the average criminals again.
Preparation
Tori left his humble shack at 1:00 PM that day. The fight was scheduled to be at 5:00 PM. The ring was 2 hours away, and Tori figured that would be plenty of time to get to his destination.
Uke's castle was 5 minutes away from the ring, and did not bother getting out of bed until 10:00. He had a big breakfast feast and at 4:00 went down to the ring to warm up.
As Tori walked into the ring he saw three of his friends including Hampa, Veb, and Gman. He also saw some of The Order's greats; including KiTFox, Rutzor, and 3vi1 (pronounced Threevil). He was scarcely nervous and was ready to take the world out of this chaos.
The Fight
Tori and Uke entered the ring with there friends rooting them on. There would be no referee so almost anything goes. It was decided that the fight would begin as the clock tower rang four times. The pressure on both combatants must have been extreme; however, neither of them showed any signs of weakness.
Ding! That was the first ring of the bell the fight would start in a moment.
Ding! Both combatants took a deep breath, and got in there starting stance.
Ding! Uke took off running, attempting to catch Tori by surprise.
Ding! Uke was more then half way to Tori by this time. Tori held his honor and waited for the this bell to begin. Although Tori did not have the advantage, he still charged at Uke.
Time seemed to slow as the two competitors charged at each other. Birds did not sing, the water in the rivers ceased to flow, and the entire world held its breath. Tori and Uke were less then 10 yards apart. Uke lunged at Tori head first, yet again trying the catch him off guard. Tori extended his hips and extended his glutes. Tori's heel caught Uke straight in face. Uke gasped out his last breath as the destruction of Tori's heel caved in his head and snapped his neck. Uke's body slapped across the ground his friends stood there in astonishment. Their all powerful leader was beat with a single blow to the face. Tori's friends turned to congratulate him, but he was already gone. He wanted to go home and rest.
Anything I should add? (No, I will not add you to the story) I will be making a render to go with this, then I will submit it to Steve's Epic Scene Comp.
Last edited by Spartan094; Jan 29, 2009 at 11:53 PM.
<Crooked> I'd say spartan, cause if he's tough enough to digest ungodly amounts of alcohol he clearly has the best body
and 3vi1 (pronounced Evil).
rofl.
a bunch os spelling erros:
...much to advanced for the young fighters...
...one fighter that could not be beaten...
...Every morning at six he...
...Their all powerful leader was beat ...
Also, may want to add soemthing about how Tori didnt liek the state of the order, and the chaos it had brought to the world
Very nice story though, dramatic ending
Cant wait to see the render!
When I see you, my heart goes DOKI⑨DOKI
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