i need some help with disemberments......
i nont understad how to dsm i thik my best replay was that (i've attached it)
i dont know how ,lets say nirs does it.........
PLEASE help me!!!!!!

Apart from the being a decent replay, what seems to be the problem?

this is my best replay and others are like this:

can someone help me i red those tutorials bu they dont help.... T_T