Basically what Ostakex said.
Very bad camerawork, most of the time I struggled to see what went on to be honest. Couldn't enjoy the vid at all because of it and I have no idea what went on in half of those replays, or even more.
Music was a bad choice imo, not a lot of spark here. No sync, intro had a few flaws, transitions and effects were random with no style.
And this isn't your first public video at all.
I'd rate it a 4/10, but you could do much better. Have more patience while you're learning videomaking, it does take time.