I don't like the lens grime effect, it's too much. Maybe you could choose one with less...grime
There are so many sparring videos, try something different :x
In the opening replay, you could see somebody /lp 1 tori, but he's not there in the rest of the video. I think you /lp 1 the wrong person. Also try to incorporate some free camming into the video, even it's just really subtle and small. It makes it more interesting in my opinion.