this
I feel like it wanted to be the walmart version of this
It felt choppy at some parts
Your keyframing is still like really sharp and not smooth
also work on your transitions make them fit more instead of just cutting to the next replay
Never rush a project, just take your time. Would you rather see a project that had time put into it? Or a rushed sloppy unexecuted video?
I believe the choppiness he is referring to can be seen around 0:17-0:19 ; looks like a loss in frames, when you slowed it down (I noticed this in your previous vid aswell) it gets really jumpy, i.e. choppy.
0:30 that transition was really iffy and sudden, ruins the flow/ mood of the edit.
I do agree that you need to mess around with more effects and create your own style, rather than just screen pumps every other second.
Keyframming is a little odd.
Your angles could be improved slightly, ex. around 0:24ish-0:28ish the angle was just straight up odd.
Other than that the mood of this edit and the vibe is great. Great shader for the music choice. You still have a lot of improving to do but it's better than a lot of peoples so keep up the good work.