sorry man i dontlike it cuz
the both are too bright
too big is the text, and i think that font isnt fit with this style
play with the shadows and highlights, that will be better
goodluck
They're not my style, but they're decent. I think you've overdone them a bit on the brightness, though. Needs more contrast.
"Call yourself alive? I promise you you'll be deafened by dust falling on the furniture,
you'll feel your eyebrows turning to two gashes, and your shoulder blades will ache for want of wings."