My toribashian with a sword and shield I made standing in a crappy landscape.

that is pretty good.
better landscape = better picture.
your head texture could be better.
other wise...7/10

4/10

reasons:

bad:
the sword, while simple, lacks style, just looks like a plain sword
as you said, the landscape is crappy, C4D has a landscape object, used correctly, you can achieve astounding results
bad textures, not talking about your tori here, the sword should have a very high reflectivity (somewhere around 75%) the terrain texture is just horrible, grey = not ground :P

good:

the pose, is quite acceptional, as is the idea itself.


all in all, you have lot's of improving to do.