um, you do know its like 15 seconds long, 10 of which are plain black?
Well, firstly i dont like the font used, too big and too spindely, you guys need a logo and a really pro looking 3d intro.
Think of Ubisoft's intros for Farcry or Spore, so simple. Or Crytech's. You just need a logo and a small solid looking name.